Gleeps! Where has Jeez John been all the life of this TVWriter™ minion? This dude’s been around. Not only does he know about the shit we all have to go through when writing US broadcast network TV, he’s able to be funny as hell while he out-bitches the bitches!
by Jeez Jon
“UP” ROUGH CUT 3 NETWORK NOTES
Hello! Thank you so much for turning around our previous round of notes so quickly. While we appreciate all the time and effort your team made, we unfortunately are a long way off from being ready with this cut. The show currently lacks focus. Where was the bite pass we asked for? We desperately need to guide the audience through the show and the only way we can do that is with bites, especially with Act One. With a thorough bite pass, we can then guide our audience through the dense rainforest that is our story. Right now, I feel as lost as that old man! (BTW he looks genuinely old instead of TV old; any way we can young him up in Color Correction?) Once we get this bite pass done, then we’ll give you time coded notes.